Personal Notes For Improvements

Since I wasn't in for the last editing session for the rough cut I wasn't able to see the finished product. However now its uploaded on to the blog I have some ideas of how we could improve it further.

Rough Cut 1 :

• The record effect seems out of place when on every time their friends are seen as its a very few times we see them so it pops out at the randomness times. The fact there's no special effects to make it look like a home video adds to my point as the lighting is the same as the rest of the video so it adds no extra meaning. 
• The recording button is mostly used for videos and the first time we see it were taking a picture. 
• The carousel shot is a bit too short but it changes to the beat which is a good thing.
• The scenes with the friends on the carousel should maybe be spread throughout the video as it only occurs twice.
• The use of black and white looks irrelevant as it has no meaning and is shown at random times so we would have to think of another way to incorporate it with a good explanation why. 
• The first scene we see with a friends shouldn't be n black an white as the friends is the joy and the theme of having fun. 
• The first time we see the red smoke we should see more of the artist.
• Some scenes are out of sync with the music.
• As the artist pushes the camera upwards to the sky it takes to long before we see the fade in of the cloud of smoke.
• We need to see more close ups in the beginning rather than the end.
• We also need to see more of the synergy. 
• replace the first scene of the green smoke scenes as the artist looks put off guard
• The sparks shouldn't be on top of the carousel scene as it will distract the audience from the importance of the carousel and with the record effect it looks like there's to much going on in one scene.

The second rough cut is similar so I wont rewrite the list but just talk about the new problems we can improve.

Rough Cut 2 :

• The camera sound effect delays the track.
• The scene where the artist walks into the shot should be incorporated into the first rough cut. This would solve the problem where there is a long gap between her hitting the camera upwards and her getting surrounded by the smoke.